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Grime (Rated R)

He closed the door
Her clothes shed to the floor

No words are spoken
Don't want the silence broken

She knows what he desires
It's all that transpires

She lies on her back
Waiting for his attack

Eager to please
With widespread knees

He put his face
To her secret place

Inhaled her scent
Anticipating the event

He starts the bump and grind
Their bodies so entwined

He grunts with each thrust
Looking to satiate his lust

She bites her lip
As her eyes start to drip

Oblivious he is
As he gets what is his

He spills his seed
Her insides he feeds

Tired, sweaty and spent
He got dressed and went

Left without speaking
Her body now leaking

She lays in their mess
This her acquiesce

Five inches at a time
Filling her with grime

Filling the holes in her soul
It exacts a certain toll

Grime (Rated R)

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Most Helpful Guy

  • Your (excellent) writing always makes me think. And usually smile. And occasionally a little afraid for you... But always much respect for the skillz.

Most Helpful Girl

  • This sounds like either it's about a prostitute or a rape victim. Like a woman who's unhappily having sex with a man and is miserable about it.

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  • Nice poem.

    Seems like a one night stand experience.

    • Thank you Stacyzee

  • WOW. That was intense. One of your best poems I would say. Incredibly vivid.

    • Thank you

  • Why can't we follow stuff anymore. I want to put this in my follow file for later.

    This is really good and really well written.

    • Thank you

  • Excellent Betwyn. Unlike 99.99% of people, you're actually truthful.

    • Thank you Levin

  • Awesome shit. Keep it up yeah?

    • I tend to :)

  • Mmm... it's the last lines that make me think. Hot poem. Use condoms next time lol

    • what did it make you think?

    • Well I relate to it. I feel you in this sense: you have a bit of a broken soul and you need sex to fill these gaps, but it comes at a price and sometimes not one you like, hence it is a toll. The grime is a reminder of the ending: that which fixed your soul in the moment, is now nothing but grime leaking out afterwards as he leaves. This leaves you with another hole in your soul that needs to be fulfilled, and so it repeats itself.

  • I thought this was going to be about music... "Grime" is a genre in the UK.

  • This wasn't bad, but the rhyme felt a bit forced to me. You also switch between past and present time a lot, which you can obviously do for artistic effect, but it doesn't improve the continuity of the piece.

    • Rhyme is not something that comes naturally to me. Which rhymes in particular feel forced to you?

    • "She knows what he desires It's all that transpires"

  • hmmmm... welp, it's good XD.

    • Thank you.

    • You're welcome :D.

  • Nice one, I guess.

    • you guess?

    • I don't know much about poetry.

    • did it make you think? or feel?

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  • so beautiful poem !!!

    • Thank you

  • you fuck everything? thats unhygienic.. .

    • ha ha ha. So, I guess you like the shirt then

  • Doesn't sound like it was too good for her!

    • Sounds like rape, that's why.

    • @Hannah591 Actually, it doesn't. See the stanza "Eager to please. With widespread knees." That sounds pretty consensual.

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