Guys, Feedback on my sexting game please?

[Anonymous]

thinking about running the tip of my tongue over your balls and up your hard cock and nibbling on the head of your dick then i wanna make it really wet by using a lot of spit and taking your dick deep into my throat... then you can hold my head back by gathering all my hair in your fist and cum all over my face watch it run down my neck and chest...

could you please thrust your cock deep inside my mouth, stretching my throat and making me squirm. I want you to take my panties off with your teeth inch by inch, after that I want you to gently circle my clit with ur fingers don’t stop till I tell you to. then get in the shower with me and smack my ass, grab it and gently spread my cheeks and finger my pussy, we’ll get pretty worked up then I want you to rub your hard cock against my clit I’ll get so wet and horny bc of you that we'll do it soaking wet on the bed, I’ll be on top riding you so hard and fast whilst kissing your neck...

[Anonymous]

Good but better if you describe each part in more detail. Add power play into it a bit more and take out the nibbling.

"Thinking about" changed to "I really need to"

"Deep into my throat" Add something like, "it makes me dripping wet to have you deep in my throat because I know you're in control.

"Cum all over face" play up the cum. "Huge, hot load right where it belongs."

"Circle my clit" mention how it will make you feel.

Etc.

[Blistersonmybrain]

To me it's not overwritten or evil enough, but then again I'm weird. You should probably mention more nuclear warheads, alien artifacts and plans to kill all the worlds pokémon, just in case you're sexting someone of a similar mental disposition as me.

[william_wizard]

It's good. Very detailed which is always a plus. Only thing I would say is that it's better when you can go back and forth with someone. Write shorter entries that they can respond to, so on and so forth. That's when it gets really intense. ;)

[Red_Arrow]

I can't judge your sexting game on just that. We need to see the pictures you will send.

[wagsingle]

Licking the head but NO NIBBLING! Teeth are never part of a great blow job.

[bowenw]

Fantastic! He won't be able to stop himself from jerking off.

[chriscdi]

detailed, that is the key to sexting, you'll be fine

[Kenneth14621]

Pretty good but I wanted some rubbing the cock on your ass while we are in the shower.

[Jamie05rhs]

You're pretty good! Nicely done.

[joeldalton]

The word nibble should never be used in conjunction with a guy’s dick.

[S5ARR0W]

Those are boring. Just go line by line.

[dvp724]

Hmu, I got a few notes for ya